The time has come to for another round of Friday Fictioneers Hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields of Addicted to Purple. A bunch of us bloggers write 100 word stories on what our imaginations come up with for the photo prompt.
This weeks photo is share by -David Stewart at The Green Walled Tower
I don’t get a chance to do it every week but trust me they are fun to do. Please join us at Friday Fictioneers
My story this week is ‘The Gift’ rate G and is exactly 100 words.
She’s in her faded housecoat, a rag tied on her head. A pot of meatless beans is simmering on the stove. Her foolish, unemployed man is in the pub as usual.
“I finished, please my dear.” He pleads, “come.”
She turns off the pot, wipes her hands and hangs her apron on a hook.
“Okay,” she sighs.
He pulls her through the crowd that has gathered in the square.
“Why did you bring me to see this junk?”
“I made it for you.” He says. “Happy Valentine’s Day.” Then hand her a check from the Chamber of Commerce. She faints.
February 14, 2013 at 4:42 PM
This is a sweet Valentine’s story.
February 14, 2013 at 4:45 PM
Thanks Ted.
February 14, 2013 at 4:58 PM
I hope you’re not offended if I say “what a nice story.” It’s a story that makes me feel good after feeling her down-trodden spirit and that he will perhaps make more of an effort now. It seems to me that he loves her and I’m happy she went with him and didn’t just tell him to take a hike.
Hope you’re having a happy Valentine’s Day,
janet
February 14, 2013 at 5:03 PM
Thanks. She does love him and wants him to do the right thing. He’s always messing up. I wanted to portray him having a big payday that’s why she fainted.
I hope your Valentine’s day is good too.
February 14, 2013 at 5:04 PM
I did get the big payday part and I can understand why she fainted. I hope they do something useful and something fun with the money and he stays on the working track!
February 14, 2013 at 5:54 PM
She faints. Haha..funny Valentine.
February 14, 2013 at 5:55 PM
Yes he made some money finally.
February 14, 2013 at 6:47 PM
I actually know guys like that!
February 14, 2013 at 6:49 PM
Oh so do I. HeHe!
February 14, 2013 at 6:52 PM
February 14, 2013 at 6:11 PM
The right kind of reason to faint (or was it because she found the subject matter frightening)?
February 14, 2013 at 6:19 PM
She was surprise he wasn’t spending his time in the pub but was actually earning some money. A large amount actually.
February 14, 2013 at 8:05 PM
Really nice story. Bless him he tries. Finally succeeded too!
February 14, 2013 at 8:27 PM
Thanks Jackie.
February 14, 2013 at 8:58 PM
I love the images in your first paragraph. I see the scene. “a pot of meatless beans”–great image.
February 14, 2013 at 9:46 PM
Thank you very much.
February 14, 2013 at 9:31 PM
awe. I love it.
February 14, 2013 at 9:47 PM
Thanks
February 15, 2013 at 2:35 AM
A nice story for Valentine’s Day. Well done.
February 15, 2013 at 3:44 AM
Thank you.
February 15, 2013 at 4:03 AM
What a lovely Valentine. Well done.
February 15, 2013 at 4:40 AM
Thank you kindly. I will look to read yours in the morning.
February 15, 2013 at 4:45 AM
I like it. I like the ‘meatless beans’ line. I should use that sometime
February 15, 2013 at 6:23 AM
I like the happy ending ‘reveal’ in this. We never really know what’s going on in someone else’s world, do we? Great take on the prompt.
February 15, 2013 at 6:51 AM
That’s a great ending. I like the fact that he’s not as useless as she thought. Underneath it all, he’s a romantic after all.
February 15, 2013 at 4:40 PM
That’s the point I wanted to make.
February 15, 2013 at 6:55 AM
Dear Kim,
You’ve painted a vivid picture. Sounds like he’s cleaning up his act. I’m a sucker for a happy ending.
shalom,
Rochelle
February 15, 2013 at 5:54 PM
There she was thinking badly of him and all the time he was pulling off a big surprise. I wish I could keep a secret that long. Great story.
February 15, 2013 at 5:57 PM
I can’t keep one that’s for sure.
February 15, 2013 at 8:52 PM
Nice twist! She had no idea.
February 15, 2013 at 8:57 PM
Thanks. Not at all.
February 15, 2013 at 11:08 PM
Excellent tale, great angle on the prompt.
February 15, 2013 at 11:43 PM
Thank you.
February 16, 2013 at 5:19 AM
He’s pretty talented to have pulled that off! No more meatless days for those two; very cool story.
February 16, 2013 at 6:08 AM
Thanks. No more beans eirlther.
February 16, 2013 at 10:23 AM
Lovely happy end, and hopefully a happy ever after in his modern fairy tale
February 16, 2013 at 12:11 PM
Yes hopefully.
February 17, 2013 at 6:23 PM
well done. question: should “Then hand her a check…” be “TheY hand her a check…”?
February 17, 2013 at 6:43 PM
Thanks. I should change it to then handed her a check. Her husband gave her the money he earned from the Chamber of Commerce.
February 17, 2013 at 6:45 PM
that was going to be my second guess. thanks.
February 17, 2013 at 7:42 PM
Thanks for pointing that out.