A cool breeze reaches up and kisses the perspiration from their brow and as they take a rest from their hike. A secluded area with all the privacy they want. “Come honey let’s look over the cliff.” Maryanne says. Sean drops his backpack and joins her at the edge. “Oh you can’t see from there come closer.”
“What’s down there?” Sean asks
“I see a mama bear and her cubs.”
Sean puts one foot on the edge and carefully pushes his body out to see down the cliff. “Where?” He asks.
Maryanne pushes. “There!” She smiles a smile of satisfaction.
©Kimberly Wilhelmina Floria 01/22/14
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It’s time for Friday Fictioneer’s and it’s another week that I am sharing my interpretation for the above photo prompt. For those who haven’t heard Friday fictioneeer is an addictive writing challenge. Thanks to our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields of Addicted to Purple who provides us with a new photo to work with every Wednesday until Friday to come up with an original 100 word story. It is an excellent way to fine tune your editing craft. But it’s okay if you go over or below the word count a little. I guess it’s okay as long as you’re not submitting War and Peace. I find it challenging to work my story, this week poem down or up until I have exactly 100 words.
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Scary…..scary good:)
Thanks 🙂
I was thinking already that I wouldn’t lean out because my brother would have shoved me too. 🙂
LOL!!
You are so bad, Kimberly… I knew when I read “Come Honey… “
🙂 I’ve been hanging around you fictioneers too long. 🙂
Why, oh why, oh why? Or is she simply a psychopath. Nice to read.
Checkout the title. 🙂
I saw that one coming, but what did he do to deserve it anyway? Unless she was psycho or something. Well-structured, nicely written.
The title answers that Insurance Money, I don’t think she had any love just greed. Thanks.
Well, that’s one way to take care of it! 😮
Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/keep-calm-and-carry-on/
🙂 I read yours. It’s good dark tale.
See! This is why I don’t go hiking! Ha-ha. Great story Kim.
LOL!! 🙂
I cracked when I read the title after reading the story. I totally enjoyed it!
Your tense changes at ‘dropped,’ though. ^_^
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. I’ll check the dropped.
Geez, what a blood-sucking she-devil. Where’s Columbo when you need him?
LOL! I’m sure Monk won’t be investigating in that area. 🙂
Oh how cruel And all for money! But I guess it is a powerful motivator!
Yes money is a great motivator.
We are wicked this week, killing off our lovers….
I’m sure we all thought about it at one time or another.
Dear Kiim,
Your title tells us why. Nice clue there. That’s one way to end family strife. Hope she has a good alibi. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks. It’s secluded remember. 🙂
Enjoyed your writing here 🙂 Enjoyed this piece.
Thank you. 🙂
Greed makes people do evil things.
Nice story, though!
Sure does. 🙂
Reminds me of that horrible story in the news of the new bride, who (allegedly) pushed her new groom over the ledge. Creepy… the way she woos him with bear cubs. Ugh. First line, I think you left of a “d” on secludeD. Totally creepy story, Kim, with a totally evil wife. 🙂
Thanks. It is creepy. I’m going to fix that secluded.
Did you every see “Chicago” – the musical? I’m sure he had it coming. Good story and I bet he has a new insurance policy with her as the sole beneficiary. Delightfully wicked! Nan
Yes I saw Chicago. He probably did have it coming to him. Thanks for reading.
what was she thinking? sean good enough to be a papa bear?
🙂 I don’t know. He must of been mean to her.
She certainly took advantage of the moment, Kim, although not in a very loving way. Maybe he should have guessed when she asked him to up the insurance. 🙂 Right here, ” seclude area”, you’re missing a “d” on “secluded.”
janet
Thanks Janet. I’m going tpo fix it right away.
Ooooohhhh – evil.
Good one though!
🙂 glad you like.
Great story, Kim, and I found myself chuckling at the end, how horrible is that? 🙂
Everyone seemed to be tickled. 🙂 Glad you liked.
Biatch! 😉
No witnesses. 🙂
well that was brutal ha-ha, but i loved it scarily 😉
Thanks glad you liked it.
Looks like that insurance policy was all that was needed to push her into pushing him over the edge.. Good tale, Kim.
Thanks money trumps love. 🙂
Oh dear, I like this TOO much!! And unfortunately, though I was watching a true-crime story last night on this very subject, I still like it–the bad, murderous husband got his justice, so I’m happy.
Lol it’s okay you didn’t do it. I take your comment as a wonderful complimen. Thank you.
You’re most welcome–and I’ll try to keep you laughing, it’s one of my fave traits.
Ooh, nicely dark! That’s a bit below the belt, tempting him with the promise of seeing little baby bears 🙂
Had to get him to the edge some way. 🙂 Thanks for reading.
Sounds like something that’s been in the news about newlyweds. The bride of a few days allegedly pushed her husband over a cliff. Not sure what the outcome was. You might have put your finger on it with this monied tale. Good one.
🙂 I just started writing and let my muse take me where it will and this is where it took me.
Wouldn’t we all like to do that with somebody? No, not you, Kimberly!
No I would be the one to get caught. 🙂
a really peaceful and clean way to get rid of him 🙂 nice twist at the end!
Liebe Grüße
Carmen
Thanks. appreciate you reading.
I love such wicked endings 😀 good for Maryanne!
🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed.
How perfectly evil – and (not so) living proof as to why I never sit cliff-edge with any other =)
Lol. I don’t like hieghts so it would never be me.
Oh that was cruel!
Yes greed. 🙂
You one bad girl!
DJ
She couldn’t help herself. 🙂
Your part is interesting!
Just a short 100 word story.
that’s one heck of a way to break up with someone 🙂 oh well, maybe he deserved it.. oddly enough, i liked maryanne and how she said “there!” 🙂
Thanks. She just wanted the insurance money. 🙂
HAHA You cruel woman, you 😉 Excellent.
🙂 The best I could come up with this week. :-p
I love it 🙂
Thanks
Not gonna lie, I totally seen that coming! Great story though.
Yea I know I didn’t really have anything else for this photo. 🙂
Oh it was good!
🙂
Ha.. I can tell you there were better places along that path.. a little bit further on it was really narrow and with a sheer drop of 50 m… We both survived the trip .. Great story.
I’m glad you survived but poor Sean should of stayed down the hill. 🙂 Great photo btw.
There must be something about this picture that makes people want to push others down the mountain. I did something along the same lines. Great story! 😀
I will get to it soon. Yea sometimes we all get the same inspiration.
Wondering what a psychiatrist would make of this. 😉
🙂 I’m versatile nothing more nothing less.
Oh this is just so beautiful and peaceful !
Really? Thanks.
Gave me a good chuckle lol nicely done! in a maniacal sort of way 😀
thank you Andy.
I think the relationship is played out… it’s certainly over for good now. Savagely nice, Kim.
Thanks Sandra you’re kind of story. 🙂